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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Success
 in
Sport
 depends on several factors. About
this
 topic, people discuss a lot and there are different opinions on what is most relevant for catching the
Success
. Some people believe that physical
strenght
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strength
 is important, others vice versa, mentioned that without mental
strenght
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strength
 you can not win. So, related to these opinions, in view of finding the hoe has right and hoe does not, I will try to explain what is most important for
success
 in
sport
. On
one
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,
hand
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 is most important to be prepared physically. The body needs to be used and adjusted at physical effort,
otherwise
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,otherwise
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 you can destroy your muscles and danger your organism.
Also
, to have performance and to win the sports game you need to be trained practically every day, so that required a good physical established.
For instance
, nobody can win a swimming competition without knowing how to swim and be not tout for
this
. On another hand, to be successful it is important to have mental
strenght
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strength
 too. For getting a good result at a
sport
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 competition, your mind must be cleaned up from all wrong information, from doubts, fears, problems, etc... so, you should be concentrate just on the game and your own aim to win.
For example
, if you need to play chess but your mind is somewhere at home or work, you will not be able to focus on what you need to do. Overall, both to be physical
strenght
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strength
 and mental
strenght
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strength
 have importance for
a
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success
 in
Sport
,
in other words
 -You should
first
 be physical and mental ready
than
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then
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 go ahead and take your trophy.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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