Science will soon result in people living to an average of 100 years and more. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Advance technology has become an upsurge in various ways. In the contemporary era, few
people
argue about developments in science that ameliorate the lifespan could be over 100 years. I strongly concur that
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it has several harmful effects on inhabitants.
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essay will substantiate my views in the following paragraph with relevant examples. On the one hand, extended life span would be beneficial for enjoying life a bit longer
also
could get a chance to do what we would not able do
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it earlier.
However
, it has several drawbacks, especially, too much money would
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on health care.
For instance
, despite the fact, science resulted in living longer but for that individuals have to put massive money on a regular
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as well as have to follow the proper diet and
a regular doses
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of medicine which quite costly for middle-class
people
.
Furthermore
, it is not only expensive but
also
it would cause multiple health problems because of
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intake of medicines.
In addition
, it is thought that
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of science will lead to living longer while
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they always dependent on someone basically someone who close to them
such
as their own children or grandchild.
For example
, in
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life
people
would not spend enough time to look after, and elderly
people
always need someone to take care of them because of the age.
Moreover
, when
people
get older, they become act like they were
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so masses need to stay at home, earn money and look for them is quite difficult. To conclude considering above mentioned points it is evident that,
although
live longer
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very beneficial it has a detrimental effect on human health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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