Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

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growth
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the
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communication applications which are mainly used over the internet. The usage of these applications,
such
as Facebook, Twitter, Snapchat, ...and etc, make some
people
much
more
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closer
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around the world,
in
contrast
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make other
people
seperated
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separated
.
this
essay will discuss both sides and introduce my point of view.
In
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the one hand, the existence of the internet in our
lives
, make
people
easily exchange their
news
around the world.
For example
, if one has a special occasion, he can
share
his party with his family and his friend even if they are
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in
different
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country.
Thus
, it is
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how the internet has
make
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people
feel close together.
on the other hand
, it is popularly that
people
tend to
share
their
news
, their special parties, and their interests with
others
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people
who live away and who do not have any relation with them, but at the same
time
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they tend to keep
theselves
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themselves
away from their neighbours or their
relatives
.
In other words
, they isolate
their self
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locally,
however
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they do not mind
to
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share
their
news
with anyone who
are
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outside their countries, cities, and
their
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towns. I expect that because they do not want to allow anyone of their
relatives
to
interfer
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interfere
in their
lives
, since the others can not affect
on
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their
lives
because they are already outside their home town. In my opinion, I totally agree with
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both point of
views
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, and
that is
because I have noticed that most
of
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the
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people
tend to hide their private
lives
from their
relatives
or their friends to protect their privacy. so most of the time, they keep themselves away from their neighbourhood,
relatives
and friends. They,
for instance
, virtually
share
their updates with their family who live far away, but they do not prefer to
share
the same updates with their close family, neighbours, or friends in real life. so the
people
who are live part away feel they are close when they exchange their updates ,
in
contrast
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the close
people
feel isolated from each other when they do not
takepart
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take part
in
relatives
' events
inreal
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in real
life. to conclude, sometimes, we can not understand
understand
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why
people
prefer sharing their
news
with
who
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those who
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are
live
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away from them, but they absolutely do not like sharing the same
newe
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news
with other
people
who are close to them, and they tend to isolate
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themselves
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them selves
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themselves
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in local.
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