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3. Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do advantages of this trend outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Model Answer:

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The diagram shows the design for a
wind
turbine
 and its location. It is observing that
machine
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 consists of four parts, which are connected between them. Altogether, have
main
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 role of
energy
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energy-producing
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producing
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, by following all
process
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 needed to obtain it. A
wind
turbine
 looks like a huge fan.
This
 resemblance is caused whereas, it is formed of
high
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a high
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 steel tower, and blades which are made of fibreglass or wood.
Also
, the
machine
 has
generator
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a generator
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 and a
wind
 sensor.
This
 design makes that the
turbine
 can achieve
the
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natural
energy
 and at the same time does not spoil the landscape. The diagram illustrates how the
machine
 works. The process starts when the wave goes to blades,
then
 the sensor determines the speed and direction of
wave
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, the wave is generated and afterword the
energy
 is produced. The
wind
turbine
 can be located at different places. It is seen that the
turbine
 can be located
at
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 straight land, in water, near home by
seaside
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the seaside
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 and on
high
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the high
a high
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 point of
hill
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the hill
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. The one situated near home was named as domestic
turbine
, but another situated on the open spice territory has a small building
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nearby
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near by
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nearby
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 and are checked by a computer. In comparison, it
is shows
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 that the optimum location of the
machine
 is at the top of
hill
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the hill
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, by
seaside
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the seaside
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 and in the water, because there is generated
maximum
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a maximum
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 of
wind
 strengths. In general,
wind
 turbines are the future and it is
simpler
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a simpler
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 way to generate
energy
, without a lot of costs and not cause damages
for
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environment
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the environment
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.
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