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The Internet negatively influence to people. What is the problems of this? What solutions should be done?

#internet #influence #people
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter in response to your advertisement related to part-time voluntary unpaid
work
 published in The Times Of India
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 section dated 03 July 2021. I believe your management is seeking
for
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some
assitance
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assistance
 in managing
museum's
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 website and social media handles. My name is Amol Joshi and I live in the same neighbourhood. As a
child
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 I was always fascinated by museums and I admire the role
museum
's play in shaping a children's imagination and cognizance. I would be really glad if I could be of some help to your
museum
. I come from a computer science and digital marketing background and have been working in the same
from
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past
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the past
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 10 years. I have
a
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good hands-on experience
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 website design and development.
Moreover
, I do understand how to position
museum
brand
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 on social media channels and how to increase
the
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followers. To sum up I have the apt skillset & qualities you might be looking for. Though
,
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 I am full time employed by my organisation, I can spare
good
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 amount of time over the weekends. On public holidays or
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evenings
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evening
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 I can even come down to
museum
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the museum
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 to discuss the
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 and requirements with your administrative team. I am very passionate about
about
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my
work
 and will assure you
my
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 full dedicated support. Please contact me at +91 8806517047 so we can
further
 talk about
this
 requirement. I look forward to your affirmative response. Yours faithfully, Amol Joshi
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