happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some argue that
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happiest during
teen
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period. while others believe that
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adulthood brings more happiness
although
there
are
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greater
responsibility
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. In my opinion, I believe that young peoples,
lives
are happiest than adults.
First
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all, from an economical point of view,
teenagers
are not aware
about
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the conditions that
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in the daily life.
For instance
, most
teens
do not know the facts that affect the country economy
such
as oil prices in the world.
Secondly
,
although
it is very common that young peoples do some jobs in present times, most
teenagers
do not have financial responsibilities like rents or housing costs owing to their parents afford these costs. Another good reason to state that teenager years are the best times in
people
's
lives
, is that during school periods young students are focused mainly
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the academic environment.
Consequently
,
teens
live their life in a
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scenario in which the connected activities like sportive championships music festivals and even scientific competitions represent the daily duties that young peoples should deal with
Finally
, From a social perspective,
teenagers
do not fear
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social concepts or discrimination.
As a result
, they live as they consider.
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, most
teens
are involved in
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activities, and
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organizations as well. Those relationships undoubtedly are common among young
people
rather than adults. In conclusion,
teenagers
years are the happiest for most
people
due to the activities they normally do. There are
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worries about current affairs like oil markets or political situations.
teenagers
are commonly are not influenced by social gossip.
In addition
, school times are very important in the
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ages because
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positive influence that it has in young's
lives
.
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