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Students should pay the full cost of their own study because university education benefits individual rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #cost #study #university #education #society
there is an opinion that total fees
of
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the
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university studies are to be afforded by the learners themselves as only individuals
get benefitted
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by
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 having higher education and society has no advantage from that.I do not agree with
this
 opinion.The aim of
this
 essay is to elaborate on my opinion. To start with, I oppose the given statement because of the following reasons. Nowadays , higher educational universities have increased the term payments and if a student comes from a middle-class family he cannot afford that much of the fee.
As a result
, he would not go for higher studies.
Thus
 he cannot apply to
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jobs where graduation is the minimum
criteria
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.
For example
, many Central Government Jobs require a
bachelor
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 degree to apply for any post.
Consequently
, the number of employed people in public decreases.
Additionally
, If a student comes out from a college or university with a degree, he will be able to start his own business and can create jobs for others too.
As a consequence
, the unemployment problem in a community gets lowered.
Thus
this
 student is indirectly helping the public.
FOr
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 instance, in the coming ,decades most
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students are inclined to start their own businesses and will recruit many individuals.
Hence
, they are serving a lot to the nation.For all these reasons, I believe that students should be helped by the Government and society for their higher studies for the economic development of a nation.
To conclude
, the essay has discussed the given situation and explained the reasons for my disagreement.
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