Some people think that children should start school sooner while others believe that they should not start it before the age of seven. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

The belief of
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to commence academy early can be viewed in different ways, due to believing, norms and values. In recent times the rise in starting
school
earlier has increased due to
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nature of life. From the
view point
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of starting institute earlier in
children
, it is best because with the recent development in technology in the world most
children
born in
this
technology age has more experience in terms of their doings.
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is much increased developmental mental stability in
children
who has the opportunity to start
school
quickly. The learning process is longer than
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olden days. Most schools in
this
era
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the capacity to stand any
child
's disabilities. It is very clear that a
child
who begins education very fast has a greater influence
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both the parents and the
children
.
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in a case of a
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mother that needs to start working back after the maternal leave and
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is no help, most of them
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to put the baby in
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,
this
would save enough stress and
this
would make the
child
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adapt very fast. On the opposite side of
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if
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infant without parents that don't think
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the benefit of starting
school
early feels it
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waste of money doing that, they
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the
child
gets to a standard age before commencing
school
. There is
also
a
believe
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that most
children
how goes to
school
too early
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no chance of learning anything. In conclusion, the merit of
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stating
school
early awaits the demerit with better planning and proper understanding of the needs of early educational background.
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