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Stress related illness are becoming increasingly common .what do you think the causes of this ? What solutions can you suggest?

#stress #illness
People
 are become
increasing
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 ill
as a result
 of
stress
 faced by them ag their
work places
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 .
this
 essay will discuss two main causes of
stress related
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 sickness including longer working
hours
 and poor diet choices .
This
 essay will
also
 suggest solutions to these problems including improving one's
work
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work-life
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life
 balance and healthy lifestyle .
People
 nowadays are working longer
hours
 than ever before .the growing competitions
of
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workplace
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 are
on
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 of the major reasons for
this
 phenomenon.
For
instance
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 many believe that putting on longer
hours
 will help them gain recognition and will help them to climb up the ladder at workspaces .
As a
result
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 many are suffering from severe
stress
 and sickness followed it.The best solution is to find
a
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wor
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work
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life
 balance .
people
 should give equal importance to their personal
life
 as well .Taking
timeout
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 from
work
 , engaging in leisure time activities with one's family all help to destress a person.
In addition
 , man are least bothered about their dietary habits .
stress
 cause some to eat more and others to skip their meals
People
 often forgot that our body needs optimum nutrition to perform at
our
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 best levels .the
soution
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solution
 of
this
depend
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 entirely on each individual by making healthier food choices indulging themselves in physical activities .these will help them to improve their health and reduces the risk of future
stress related
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stress-related
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 illness . In
conclusion
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 more and more
people
 are suffering from
stress related
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 issues .these
days
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 the major cause of
this
are
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longerworkong
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longer working
hours
 and poor dietary habits. The only solution to these
are
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, eat
healthy
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 and create a proper
work
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work-life
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life
 balance .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stress-related illnesses
  • rapid pace
  • pressure
  • balance
  • omnipresent
  • information overload
  • disconnect
  • economic uncertainties
  • job insecurity
  • financial stress
  • environmental factors
  • chronic stress
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • mental health
  • support programs
  • physical activity
  • healthy eating habits
  • awareness
  • accessibility
  • counseling
  • stress management
  • community environment
  • reconnect with nature
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