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Letter to local newspaper Airport to expand, increase the number of light Where you live Describe the problem Give reasons why you do not want this development

#newspaper #airport #light #development
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you to show my disagreement
on
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 the development of
local
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the local
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Airport
at
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 Delhi.
As
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this
project
 can cause many negative consequences to the local residents. I live near Delhi
Airport
 and I am hoping that you will publish an article in protest of
this
project
. The development can cause multiple issues for the hundreds of old age and children part of more than 4000 residents in total, living nearby. The existing air traffic already causing too much
of
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turbulence and noise which is making
the
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life difficult
of
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 everybody here, students, at the time of examinations not able to concentrate and sleep, the sick and old people are already living in
noisy
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the noisy
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 environment here.
Moreover
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 the air traffic
in
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 night
disturbed
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 the most. Because of multiple airlines operating from
this
airport
, too much
of
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ground traffic exists which creates difficulty in day to day life. Expanding the
airport
 will consider acquiring our beautiful park which is used by the population living nearby.
Moreover
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 it will disturb the environment in
this
 area as all the trees will be removed.
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environment
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 disturbances, pollution will increase.
Airport
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 authority
also
 has
plan
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 to increase the number
flights
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 after expansion which will add to the existing disturbances. Considering all these issues everyone in our local society is against
this
project
 of
Airport
 development.
Hence
 request you to publish an article in protest of
this
Airport
 expansion
project
 favouring the local residents. I am looking forward to
hear
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 from you. Yours faithfully Tahir
Saife
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Safe
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