some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

We are living in a country of vast diversity. Different states
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comprises
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comprised
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of varied
cultures
and traditions.
People
value customs more than anything. Many studies have been conducted to understand the origins of the
cultures
and find the link between them.
Notable
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number of
people
say that
music
is a good way to bring
people
of varied
cultures
and ages together. In
this
day and time,
people
are interested in listening to
music
. Like different
cultures
in our nation,
music
also
has varied categories. Some are interested in listening to pop
music
, while
other
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may be attracted
towards
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listening
folk
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style.
This
helps in getting close to each other.
For example
, two strangers entering a hostel room for the
first
time,
although
their
cultures
or age may vary. One might be from Andhra Pradesh, while the other can be from Chennai. They cannot know each other’s language or tradition. But their interest
for
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same
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tone of
music
may match.
Thus
it might help them to get closer and understand each other.
Music
can be a link to connect different age groups
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several occasions.
For example
, if a birthday party is happening,
music
can enhance the event by making them dance irrespective of the age group.
Additionally
, it can act as a relief to the aged
people
. Parents after spending the medieval life working hard for the sake of their child’s career. There will be a day, when the parents feel that our work is done and we can relax now, at
this
point
of
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time;
music
can act as a great relief. To summarize,
although
separated by different
cultures
and varied by ages,
music
can act as a link to bring all
people
together. To add up, it will help in developing
better
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understanding of the
people
and enhances better living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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