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Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, while others feel it should be purely optional. Discuss these opposing views and give your own opinion.

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Sport
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 continues to be a controversial topic in the
school
 curriculum, just as
sport
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the sport
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 itself has become a controversial industry in some respects. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will consider now. On the one hand, some
people
 feel that
sport
 uses up time which could be better spent on academic subjects
such
 as exam preparation.
In addition
, it might be said that it is unwise to force children to do activities which they have no interest in. After all, some youngsters are just not sporty
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 and should be allowed to study
instead
.
Finally
, there are question marks over the wholesomeness of
sport
 itself, with drugging and corruption scandals increasingly common, as we see in cycling at present. Some
people
 believe that
this
 lack of morals sets a poor example
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 young
people
.
On the other hand
, though, one major benefit of
sport
 is that it helps children’s physical development at an important stage. If all their time was spent studying, they would become unfit and their minds would eventually suffer.
Furthermore
, supporters of
school
sport
 emphasise the importance of team building in sports
such
 as football or hockey, which is often felt to be
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excellent preparation for adulthood.
Finally
, many
people
 feel that a competitive spirit, so important today, is fostered by sports at an early age. It is notable,
for example
, that many successful business
people
 excelled in
sport
 at
school
. Overall, I feel that
sport
 should be compulsory for
school
 children
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 because the positive effect on their mental and physical development outweighs the negatives.
This
 is as long as children are given a wide range to choose from, to ensure their interest is high, and that the sports industry itself maintains the highest standards of conduct.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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