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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss Both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, the volume of advertising through deferent ways are increased significantly. In
this
 regard, there are some
people
 who believe that advertising is not effective as before and
people
 do not care can about it anymore.
However
, I believe advertisement and its manners like other fields of science have changed and still can convincing
people
 to be attracted by
companies
products
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe that due to the changes amount of advertising which
companies
 produced to obtain customers
people
 no longer deceived to buy new
products
. In fact, most
companies
 and advertisement agencies
in addition
 to their mission to introduce their
products
 or services more appealing to the customer they affected them adversely.
For example
, they bombard TV shows, billboards, or even any blogs on the internet with their announcements.
As a result
,
conversely
,
people
 avoid them and try to ignore them as a thing who never seen before. Some
people
 believe that if they had attracted less to the advertisements, they would have saved more money for their life.
However
, I believe advertising is still containing the same useful
techniques
 which are a good incentive for
people
 to convince them to buy more. In these years using some technologies like Artificial Intelligence (AI) some novel advertising
techniques
 are introduced that are used by
companies
. Using these
techniques
 provide
companies
 with some useful insight about their customers that give them
this
 opportunity to grasp more customer.
For instance
, Facebook and Amazon track their customers' behaviour and can predict whenever they need to buy something. The more fascinating thing is that they even can predict which exact product a customer needs in the future.
As a result
 by using AI and some new
techniques
people
 are now buying something without they know that they have been targeted by advertising magic. Some
people
 believe that if they had attracted less to the advertisements, they would have saved more money for their life. In conclusion,
although
 some
people
 believe that the advertising methods are not attractive anymore for
people
 I believe using new tools are well-equipped
companies
 to sell their
products
 like before.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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