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Some people think children should have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Education for making
mistakes
 affects youngsters' life and values. While some argue that people should give freedom to
children
 for making
mistakes
, others state that
adults
 have a duty to avoid
children
 to make
mistakes
.
This
 essay addresses both points of view and the reason why I believe
children
 should be given chances to make
mistakes
. Some argue that the public should prevent
children
 from making errors because these
irremedial
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irremediable
remedial
mistakes
 can devastate
children
's life. When young
adults
 commit illegal actions,
thier
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their
 future life can be ruined. To protect
children
's potential,
adults
 can discipline
children
 in strict manners. My
counsin's
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cousin's
 parents educate their
children
 with liberal policies.
As a result
 of lack of
disciplines
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discipline
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, my cousins started to drink
alcohole
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alcohol
 and smoke at an early age, and these habits made them distract from
studies
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their studies
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.
On the other hand
, I believe
adults
 should give freedom to have
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erroneous
 experiences because they enable
children
 to develop the ability to analyse. By experiences of making
mistakes
, the younger generation can investigate reasons for failures and give attempts until they make successful outcomes.
For example
, when I was doing tests, my parents were always encouraging me to answer all questions even if I did not know some of them. They believe making
mistakes
 give opportunities to learn by heart. In fact, I remember well about the questions that I made trial and error in the past. In conclusion, while it is considered by some that people should prevent
children
 from making
mistakes
 so as not to spoil
children
's future potential, I believe
children
 should be allowed to make
mistakes
 freely since it develops the ability to analyse for success.
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