Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

To held an international
sports
event can benefit the
country
,
however
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some
people
believe the opposite. In
this
essay, I will highlight the advantages and
disadvantage
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from
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the statement above. Hosting
an international
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international sports
an international sport
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sports
can give many advantages for the
country
.
Firstly
, the international persons will have to pay visa to enter the
country
which
ofcourse
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of course
will be an income for the visiting
country
.
Secondly
, after the international events finish, these
people
can visit other cities in that
country
.
Hence
, the tourism sector
be
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filled with
the
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international athletes and their
committee
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. These
people
will pay for meals,
accomodation
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accommodation
, transportation and other tourism places which will
also
be an income for the local persons and the visiting
country
as well.
On the other hand
, there will be an enormous cost to
held
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an international
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international sports
an international sport
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sports
.
Firstly
, the government has to develop the infrastructure of the
country
so that
the
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international persons can access the
country
easily.
Secondly
, the government has to decorate the
country
with many
baliho
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ballyhoo
related to
the
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international events.
This
decoration will not be cheap. To sum up, I agree that hosting an internal
sports
event is beneficial for the
country
. As it does not only bring money to the
country
, but it will introduce the beauty of the
country
, the cultures and the
people
to those
people
. Once they go back to their
country
, they will share their experiences with their family and friends which will make these
people
curiouse
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curious
to visit the
country
.
Although
it may cost big at the front,
but
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I think it will be a great investment for
tourism
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sector.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • infrastructure
  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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