There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are benefits and drawbacks of this?

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information regarding the Advance English course.

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, I planned to relocate to study on your Goldcoast campus,

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overseas student,

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accommodation. I do not mind the room type as long as it is

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your campus and peaceful. I am able to stay with a roommate.

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meals, I would request a

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kind of fish which I can consume. Thank you in advance, and I hope you will consider my request. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Ramon

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There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are benefits and drawbacks of this?

Fully explain your ideas

some people rely too much on doctors instead of taking care of their own health. they think all health problems can just be fixed by visiting doctors. what problems could this approach to healthcare cause and how might they be solved?

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Even through globalisation affects the world's economics in a very positive way it's negative side should be not be forgotten. Discuss both view and give an opinion.

Some people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people,s private life while others think it should be controlled. Discuss both views.