The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. what are the reasons?what are the impacts?

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
email regarding request the information of the Energy sports club. Here is located to near to my place. So, I believe that
this
will be a good selection if I can register as a
membership
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First
, my name is Mookie who is currently studying in year 9 at Browns college, Auckland city. In my free time, I usually play tennis and go
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swimming with my
families
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and friends. I personally think that these activities affect my health and daily life. The reason for attending the Energy sports club is I am interested in an intermediate swimming class as you advertised on the internet.
Also
,
this
sports club has
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excellent service and
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convenient. If I would like to apply for a long-term membership, how much will it be? I would be grateful if you could provide me
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facilities do you have. Not only these details
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but
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the price of the swimming course. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Mookie
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