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Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement? Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea. You should write at least 250 words.

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Entertainment is necessary for all
the
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individuals to keep going in
life
. It can be in various forms and one of the types is playing
games
. According to my perspective, they are vital for both
grown ups
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 and youngers. I completely agree with
this
 notion and will be supporting
this
 with my own experience.
To begin
 with, primarily, playing sports is a great stress buster and it is obvious that in today's modern world there is hardly a
person
 who is completely tension free.
Hence
, enjoying some
games
 can help in diverting the mind from the regular routine.
Secondly
, there is always a child hidden in each
person
, which needs some sort of fun, company and rewards.
Moreover
, playing with each other can help the
person
 to showcase their hidden talent and getting prizes in competitive
games
 can boost
the
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confidence.
For instance
, I was really fond of playing badminton in my school years but as
the
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time passed on I got accompanied
with
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 my studies, family and
work
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life
 which was making me depressed and stressed of regular schedule.
Then
 got an
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to join a sports club nearby, I joined
this
 at the
weekeneds
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weekends
weekend
 and
this
 one day keeps me going happily
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through out
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 the week.
In addition
 to
this
, there can be
a myriad benefits
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 of having recreations even at older ages.
Firstly
, a plethora of people are having sedentary jobs so if they choose to play outdoor sports,
this
 can be helpful to maintain
healthy
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 lifestyle.
Secondly
, playing indoor
games
 with family especially with children can really develop a healthy bond between them,
furthermore
, parents can utilise
this
 time to teach many inspiring lessons in a playful manner.
For example
, my father use to play a card game with me when I was young
,
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 and would use to give valuable teachings through the game
such
 as we should never cheat in any aspect of
life
, failure is a stepping stone to success, etc.
Moreover
,
games
 teach children to be strong and take failures sportively to work more hard from the very early years of
life
. In conclusion, according to
me
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, age is just a number and it should not stop a
person
 from doing any activity which he enjoys.
Furthermore
,a
person
 should always take out time for their hobbies, so that they can live
life
 to the fullest without taking it as a burden.
Submitted by Leena Kapoor on

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Word Count

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