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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
Today
businesses
 make every effort to generate more income, perhaps by advertising or getting advice from business consultants.
Apparently
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 they are merely focused on the financial aspect of their
businesses
 and have forgotten about the social impacts of their
activities
. With the wealth of
knowledge
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 science provides about the mental, social, and environmental consequences of different large-scale business
activities
, I believe companies should be more responsible for what they do. Imagine passing by a lingerie store with your kids where a huge explicit picture of a woman is on display. To what extent do
businesses
 worry about their impact on the children’s minds? Explicit content in advertisements means exposing the younger generation to what is quite inappropriate for their age and could affect their feelings and attitude towards women negatively.
Therefore
, when companies’ main concern is sales, they are inadvertently causing social and psychological damage to people, and so I believe they should be held responsible for their
activities
. The
activities
 of many
businesses
such
 as food, cosmetics, clothing and pharmaceuticals directly affect our bodies. It is,
therefore
, essential that companies do their best to manufacture products that are healthy. The sad reality is the opposite; a large portion of the above-mentioned products are quite hazardous to our
health
: fatty foods, sugary carbonated drinks, leaded cosmetic products and many more. Many
health
 complications are the result of
such
 productions. While it is understandable that
businesses
 have to make maximum profit, they should not achieve
this
 by sacrificing their customers’
health
 quality. In conclusion,
businesses
 have a great effect on our societies nowadays. They are closely tied to many aspects of our lives today, from moral to
health
 concerns. In my opinion, business owners have to think of rules and regulations not to impact their customers negatively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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