traffic and housing problems in major cities can be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Dear Sir, I am a regular passager of your

bus

company and

also

have made many trips on your other

bus

services. I am writing

this

latter to as I have faced some problem while travelling from

last

2 weeks. I am travelling from SG Highway to Bapunagar every day

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your

bus

with my friends for

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college

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collage

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. And as its

monsson

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monsoon

season

now a days

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raining every day.

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I have faced problems like Dirty and Wet seats,

Bus

windows are not properly sliding, and due to

rain

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the

bus

has lots of mud on the surface even the

bus

is sometimes late

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, the old age people are

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getting affected due to seats are not clean and

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tired

and wet they are not able to sit and need to stand on running

bus

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while

traveliing

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I can not sit and can not read and use my spare

time

bus

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, senior citizen needs to stand, due to wet and muddy surface sometimes I fall into the surface and my

frieds

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friends

also

once fall down and got

injury

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, A major

probem

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problem

late

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and that leads to

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coming issue at my

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and I

misses

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the classes as I don't be at

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time

. When I will be having exams these late

scheduls

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schedules

schedule

will affect more on my future career

also

. I suggest that the

bus

need to be clean every night when all the routes are clear, And

also

service the

bus

in a period of

time

. The company can do some survey on why in

monsson

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monsoon

the

bus

gets late and work around on some solution. Yours faithful Hardik

Vegad

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Vegas

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