Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss Both views and give your opinion.

As the way that
people
buy products has changed a lot , companies cope with the change via promoting their merchandise with advertisements. There are some pros and cons regarding the commercials. In
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the whole picture of
ads
in two different aspects. On the one hand ,
ads
really do help the product of companies being understood. When it comes to shopping,
people
tend to buy something that they know and want . The knowledge and desire could have emerged just the moment they were watching a TV show or surfing the Internet. A fifteen-
second
ad demonstrating which product is on sale or its information,
people
thus
remember the
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news profoundly.
As a result
, they purchase the items that
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to their deep mind, which they realize
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would be a bargain or a nice choice if I buy them right at the time. On the other hand, more and more businesses invest
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advertisements, making
people
overwhelmed with the great amounts of news.
Hence
, buyers get used to commercials and find them annoying rather than helpful and eager to buy something. In
this
situation, some companies put more effort
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making more catchy songs or slogans
instead
of merely illustrating what they want by sharing the monotonous news. Others exaggerate
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, making them not as practical
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how they really work.
Consequently
,
ads
become either popular or just like the common ones and
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ignored. In conclusion,
ads
do make
people
familiar with and provide another option for their buying.
However
, it is
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amount of information that consumers would like to get rid of. Businesses should think of another stratagem making us acceptable and willing to buy their things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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