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Many adults nowadays prefer spending their free time playing computer games. Why do they do this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In our contemporary society, many
people
 are likely to play video
games
 for entertainment. The increasing of the
game
 industry combined with the creative gameplay may be the reason for that. Personally, I think
that is
 positive, so let us consider some of the reasons in the following essay.
To begin
 with,
game
 developers focus on user experiences so that most computer
games
 nowadays bring an incredibly authentic experience.
In addition
, modern techniques as virtual reality (VR) or augmented reality (AR) allow players to become the main characters and do everything they want.
For instance
, Nintendo, one of the most famous
game
 publishers in the world, build a sensor in their gamepad that brings the simulation, vibration realistic. In the
second
 place, computer
games
 help
people
 upgrade their
skills
such
 as teamwork, management, logistic, and strategy. To pass a level, you not only using control
skills
 but
also
 using your brain to solve the puzzles. During the
game
, players
also
 need to associate with teammates through which to improve their own social
skills
.
For example
, a recent study by Queen's University found that
people
 who play
games
 for more than 6 hours a week have higher IQ and EQ than
people
 who do not play. In conclusion, playing computer
games
 is becoming more popular because of its excitement and creativity.
Besides
,
games
also
 help to practice some valuable
skills
.
However
, humans should control their time for playing
games
 so as not to affect their health.
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