We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the world, there is a great number of
people
who are in need that we are not able to assist. In spite of the claims of some
individuals
that we should only assist those in their own country, I am of the opinion that we should be trying to help as many
individuals
as possible. On the one hand, It is essential to help our neighbours and compatriots because there are still numerous
people
who are impoverished or disadvantaged in some way. There is no shortage of homeless
individuals
when we are on the street or when children are living in remote areas of our country, who do not have equal access to education, and volunteers who assist them.
For example
, Vietnamese
citizens
assist their compatriots in a number of ways, including donating clothes and food to the homeless or providing books to children in need.
On the other hand
, I firmly believe that we should help those in need in other countries. Helping them is
also
away
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, in our view, to help
people
in our own country. In the case of the COVID-19 pandemic, a number of countries are affected.
Consequently
,
people
inhabiting these countries are
also
affected. It is important for governments and
individuals
of rich nations to cooperate in order to prevent
this
spread of disease by contributing to the costs of vaccines and medical devices so that the
citizens
of these rich nations are less likely to contract these diseases. Despite some views that
citizens
should only assist their neighbours and fellow
citizens
who are in need, I feel that our assistance should be limited by national boundaries.
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