Childhood obesity is a growing public health crisis. In your opinion, what are the reasons for this and what can be done to tackle this issue?
One of the increasing actual health problems of nowadays is gaining excess weight among
young
generation. Add an article
the young
This
issue can be arisen by
the wide spreading of transnational fast Change preposition
from
food producing
corporations and Add a hyphen
food-producing
health-care
regulations from the government may be considered to tackle Correct your spelling
healthcare
with
it.
With the new technological and engineering opportunities in our era Change preposition
apply
food
production is becoming more and more available and harmful. Corporations like McDonalds
, Burger King have regular customers all over the world including adolescents because they offer tasty Change to a genitive case
McDonald's
food
for cheaper
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a cheaper
price
in minimum waiting time. Fix the agreement mistake
prices
Furthermore
, so loved junk food
as
burgers, pizzas have a high level of fats, in which cholesterol is the main reason Replace the word
like
of
obesity. The Change preposition
for
centers
of ‘tasty’ Change the spelling
centres
food
are located in every alley of every not only mega polices also
small cities. From my own experience every time when I go out with my friends, we end up by
sitting in Change preposition
apply
local
fast-Correct article usage
a local
food
restaurant as other teenagers around.
The law regulations are the strongest principles that can stop this
increasing number of youngsters obesity. To be precisely
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precise
age
limits for visiting such
restaurants should be announced since healthy
development of new generations is the most significant thing. Correct article usage
the healthy
For instance
, the
eating pizzas and burgers can be permitted from Correct article usage
apply
age
14, while the
foods with Correct article usage
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high
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a high
the high
level
of calories as traditional cuisine of China can be used from Fix the agreement mistake
levels
age
18.
To sum up, the industrialization of food
management affects to
the rising of youth’ obesity level these days and the introduction of new conditions for the use of products by Change preposition
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age
may be reviewed to tackle with it.Submitted by zhadyra.serikbayeva2016 on
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