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Many people today find that the cost of attaining a university level education is extremely high for the students and their families. What are the causes for this situation, and how can governments, universities and the students themselves overcome the problem?

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These days university education is highly expensive and has become a financial burden on most
students
 as well as their families. Even though there are several reasons contributing to
this
 issue,
such
 as the preference of private educational institutes over public ones, appropriate measures can be taken to address
this
 problem effectively.
To begin
 with causes, one factor that has led to high fee structures is the bar set by private
universities
, it is assumed that the more expensive the course or program is the more
well reputed
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 it will be.
This
 perception is ingrained in the mindsets of
students
 by the “
for profit
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” institutes. Another reason that people cannot afford a degree in a decent institute is the lack of economic stability. Most
students
 today work to pay their
fee
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 and in an era where
cost
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 of living is so high, university education becomes an inconvenience.
Hence
students
 end up acquiring difficult loan plans. Possible solutions are
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 and have to be critically strategized but can bring a positive change. Private
universities
 should be held accountable by the government for the program fee; any unnecessary charges should be excluded.
Universities
 on an income-based model should be replaced with
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education oriented
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 one.
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 another important remedy is to connect
students
 with the right organizations for
part time
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 or
full time
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 jobs as individuals with a stable income are more likely to complete their programs than the contrary. To conclude,
universities
 are generally not affordable for most people and the causes are both due to the lack of attention by the government and an effort to protest by
student
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 as well as their families. Policies to hold these institutes answerable while providing occupational opportunities to the
students
 will resolve
this
 problem.
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