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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
Some people opine that all universities should
enroll
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 the same
number
 of male and female
students
 in each course.I totally disagree with
this
 notion as I believe that both genders have
the
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equal rights to get admitted
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 a university according to their talents;while,
this
 policy violates the concept of equal rights.
Further
 details will be discussed in
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To begin
 with,education at the tertiary level is very important in sustaining and developing
the
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society.The important qualifications are
the
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academic performance and merit.Here gender
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 should not be considered.The equal
number
 of male and female
students
 in every
subject
 is a whimsical idea that would deprive many talented
students
.
Moreover
,all
male
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 and
female
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females
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 are not equally interested in studying in every
subject
,they have their own choices.Implementing
the
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 equal
number
 of male and female
students
 in each
subject
 would take away the freedom from
students
 to study
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their favourite
subject
.
Furthermore
,in
this
 contemporary modern
world
 where freedom and meritocracy are the new facts,
such
 policies will be detrimental to the democracy of the
world
.A student should be selected for a course according to his or her previous academic record and devotion to that particular
subject
 rather than taking into consideration his or her gender.
For instance
,statistics have shown that
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 in some places of the
world
 consists of more women than men.So,if we go according to the concept of the equal
number
 of boys and girls,unfortunately,we will never be able to keep the balance levelled.Definitely,it is a flawed policy. To conclude,according to my opinion,quality is always better than quantity.
Therefore
,universities should accept
students
 according to their qualities and willingness to work hard in their selective subjects because only qualitative initiatives can keep the
world
 modernised and developed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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