Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?
It is an undeniable fact that people like to visit scenic vacation spots every year. Today, more people are travelling all around the world. In my essay, I will explain the reasons
,
and the advantages of being a traveller.
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To begin
with, everyone like
to get away from their work environment, and fast-paced life to see a beautiful place. It helps them relax, and get back to their work environment with more enthusiasm. Change the verb form
likes
Also
, the kids will have a good memory of their childhood life and tend to do the same when they become parents. Not only do children enjoy it, but it is also
the chance for them to visit their loved one's
living far apart. Correct your spelling
ones
For Instance
, I like to pay a visit to see my grandmother, and cousins at least twice a year. It is the best memories
I have to date, and I reminiscence of those days even after several years.
Fix the agreement mistake
memory
In addition
, today many leave their profession and become a traveller. The primary reason is the growth of the digital medium, where visitors can do a video blog and upload it to youtube
. The crowds Correct your spelling
YouTube
are watching
Wrong verb form
watch
such
videos since they have the
interest Correct article usage
an
to go
Verb problem
in
see
a unique location. Wrong verb form
seeing
For Example
, an individual can earn thousands of dollars per month. Though it might not seem like a steady profession, it makes the folks follow their passion.
To conclude
, it is better to clear everyone's head by visiting unique vacation spots,
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enjoy
the recollection of past events. Wrong verb form
enjoying
Also
, it helps the public to become travellers,
and earn through it.Remove the comma
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...