You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • explain why you would like the job - • give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia Write at least 150 words. Early childhood teachers specialize in the learning, developmental, social, and physical needs of young children.

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Dear Mr. &

Mrs.

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Smith, I am writing with regard to an advertisement which was published in an Australian family and kid magazine

last

week. As you are looking for a caregiver who

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able to take care of your kid and can live with your family for a short term. I believe that I

am suit

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for

this

job ,and I would be appreciated if you consider my application. I, Jenny Lee, am currently working as a part-time assistant teacher at BCC school in Bangkok, Thailand. I have seven years of experience in looking after under 10-year-old kids. After reviewing your job description, I would like to apply for and take

this

opportunity because I want to learn and understand more about Australian culture. Since I have

plan

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to study

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Master degree in early childhood education

year, before the semester started, I still have time to prepare myself. On top of that, I love taking care of children, and I believe that I have the most useful qualities for

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role, including patience, honest,

compassionate

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. Apart from my personality and skills, I

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got a certificate

in home

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care and

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license. As mentioned above, I am planning to pursue

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further

education in early childhood education in Australia.

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, during my pastime, I will prepare for studying as well as joining the local communities to gain more experience about local cultures. I look forward to hearing from you. Sincerely, Jenny Lee

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