In most developed countries shopping is not only about buying the goods you need, it is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples based on your experience.

In many developed nations, consumerism is not only about buying the everyday things we need to survive but is
also
seen as a form of entertainment.
This
essay will argue that
this
is a very negative development because of the detrimental effect marketing and advertising has on
people
and the fact that it is a very unproductive hobby. The main reason
people
buy luxury items is because of the influence multinationals’ marketing campaigns have on them. We are constantly bombarded with messages telling us that if we buy a certain product we will be happier, more beautiful or more complete. In many ways, these companies trick us into buying their products, when all we need to be happy are much simpler items.
For example
, fashion chains like Chanel and Prada tell
people
that they are only good enough if they wear nice clothes and use glamorous models to make
people
feel unsatisfied with their appearance. Shopping for goods you don’t really need is
also
not the most productive thing you can do with your time. Not only is it a huge waste of money; it does nothing to develop a person either physically or intellectually. If we compare
this
activity with other popular pastimes like sport, reading or even watching movies, we can see how unfulfilling shopping really is.
For instance
, most of my friends who spend their
weekends
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shopping have nothing else to talk about, other than their purchases, whereas my friends who use their time more wisely are often much more interesting to talk to. In conclusion,
people
should only shop for
the
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necessities and not for pleasure because they are being manipulated by transnational companies and there are
also
much more constructive ways for
people
to spend their free time.
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