Some people think that movies or television can have a negative influence on young people's behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is a common belief that
movies
or
television
can heavily have a positive influence on young people’s
behavior
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.
However
, I firmly believe that watching
movies
or
television
make
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young people’s
behavior
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worse. And
this
essay will address the reasons for my views as follow.
To begin
with, there are many people
think
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who think
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that watching
movies
or
television
makes the young be
lazier
in both
thinking
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and working.
This
is because after they
spends
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lots of hours watching
films
, they will feel tired and can’t do anything. Watching
films
make the kids be
lazier
in thinking due to the available action of the
films
.
For instance
,
they
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when they watch a movie about something, they don’t have to think
what
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about what
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is the conclusion, they just have to wait for it, which is
directly
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makes them
lazier
in thinking.
This
problem can lead the youth to be lazy in both
thinking
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thinkings
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and working. On top of that, watching
movies
or
television
also
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a consuming
time
habit.
This
is because kids never just sit down and
watching
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film
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the film
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for 15 minutes or less, they always spend more than an hour watching. Due to the wasting
time
, they won’t have enough
time
for studying, doing housework or joining some of
social
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club. It makes them
staying
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at home and interact with the TV. My nephew, who is just 8 years old, can stay at home the whole
days
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just watching
films
and playing with the Ipad. He refused to play with friends or
helping
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his parents with the housework. In conclusion, watching
films
and
movies
is
the
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habit which both wasting
time
and make kids
lazier
. For these reasons, it is clear that
movies
and
television
can have
negative
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a negative
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influence
in
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on
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young people’s
behavior
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behaviour
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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