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Some people believe that everyone has the right to university education. Therefore, the government should make university education free for everyone, no matter what their financial background is. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Tuition fees for all
university
students
 with any financial status are thought by some
people
 must be paid by
governments
, because they think
everyone
 has a right to higher
education
.
Although
 I think
this
 is a good
idea
 to provide free
university
education
 for some
students
, I disagree with the
idea
 that making 
university
 
education
 free for all is one of the
governments
' services. On the one hand, I believe free tertiary
education
 for those who have a good educational background can be beneficial for society. These
students
 proved their respect for the budget which the government spent for them in schools, so the risk of leaving
university
 in the middle of studying and destroying government money is low.
Furthermore
, in
this
 way
governments
 give a chance to studious
people
 who can be more productive and beneficial for society than inactive ones. But
this
 does not ignore the right of
education
 for
everyone
 which with effort can be achieved, because either effort in the educational system or in career for making money could help
people
 to afford their higher
education
.
On the other hand
,owing to some major barriers it is impossible for
governments
 in many
countries
 to afford free higher
education
 for
everyone
. Except in some privileged
countries
, in most
countries
 due to the limitation of overall budget and expenses of
university
education
,  higher
education
 budgets are far lower than the amount they need to fulfil
this
idea
.
Therefore
 authorities have to select a limited number of
students
 for free
university
education
 based on their educational background.  In conclusion, some
people
 believe that
governments
 should allow
everyone
 to go to
university
 for free, but except some developed
countries
, it is impossible for other
countries
 to execute
this
 valuable
idea
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