If we want to save the future of the planet, we will have to drastically change our way of life. What is your opinion?

Not long ago, environment experts all over the world have come to the conclusion that the future of our
planet
is at risk. But what
measures
do we need to take to address
this
problem? Unfortunately, some of the experts believe that the impact, caused by humanity, was so significant that only extreme life-changing
measures
can prevent a disaster. I agree with
this
statement and in
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I will support my opinion with examples. Perhaps, the major force damaging the environment
are
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carbon emissions. There is a common belief that if we gradually move to clean renewable energy, our
planet
will be safe. In fact, what we need is to stop the production of all goods completely, because there is not much time left.
This
act will be a huge step back for the global economy, moving the population, approximately, 100 years back in development. Due to the big number of
people
living on the
planet
today, we will not have enough food, clothes and other necessities that are considered easy to get, nowadays and
this
will lead to a great change in our
lifestyle
. Another possible solution to help our
planet
is to decrease the rate of birth. Since the industrial
revolution
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our population has been increasing dramatically. The more
people
we have the more
production
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we need to support their living. Scientists began to realize that one of the best solutions
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this
case is to conquer other planets, like Mars. It will take around 1000 years to make their living conditions
resembling
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the ones on Earth. To stay alive humanity needs to live underground, have a completely different timezone, weather and food. All in all, for
people
who will move to another
planet
life
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will be different, hopefully, the future generations will adapt to
this
lifestyle
easier.
On the other hand
, recent evidence suggests that some risk factors associated with climate change may have been overstated and there is no climate emergency. According to researchers, global warming has not been caused by anthropogenic factors but simply natural causes. And if we applied all the possible
measures
to save our
planet
50 years ago, we would still have the same climate situation as we have right now.
Therefore
, we should not beat an alarm
,
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but change our life rationally to decline the negative impact on our
planet
without changing our
lifestyle
dramatically. In conclusion,
although
there is a belief that
people
do not need to tackle our
planet
's problems urgently, I feel that, unless we want
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life on the
planet
to become extinct, we must apply strict and serious
measures
, requiring us to bid farewell to our comfortable
lifestyle
.
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