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Travelling in group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. DO you agree or disagree with this statement.

#group #tour #guide #travel
In the running days, some people believe that travelling under the supervision of
tour
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 guide is the best approach as compared to going alone for tourism. I partially agree with
this
 point of view as travelling in a group with an expert and going alone has its own pros and cons. On the one hand,
tour
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the tour
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management
 industry is very active and popular in
the
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well-developed cities. Different offices organize their tours with the collaboration of these companies to avoid any kind of
management
 issues. These organizations provide them
proper
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with proper
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plan
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plans
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 along with conveyance and meals included with
an
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expert
guidance
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.
Moreover
, even some families contact these service providers in order to get their family vacations planned. These service providers are responsible to provide
hassle-free
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a hassle-free
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 and enjoyable
experience
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experiences
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 for their customers.
For instance
, using
services
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the services
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 of these companies will let you enjoy your holidays without any type of
management
 issues
such
 as vehicles, meals, hoteling and
risk
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the risk
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 of missing sightseeing. The journey guide will make sure you visit the right places along with
the
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an
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 understanding
of
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the background.
On the contrary
, visiting in groups with a trip organizer kills your own desires as you have to follow the instructions given by your event manager. Nobody is allowed to visit places of their choice if these are not on the list of the organizer.
Furthermore
, in a
group
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 you have to obey the rules and regulations decided by the majority ignoring the individual liking.
For example
, some people are forced to visit
such
 places which they have already visited or they have no interest
going
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in going
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 there. To conclude, travelling in
set
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a set
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 of people under the journey guide supervision has a number of benefits
such
 as proper
management
 and planning. But
on the other hand
, it does not cater personal desires of an individual.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational
  • logistics
  • convenience
  • exclusive experiences
  • safety and security
  • spontaneous adventures
  • historical sites
  • cultural practices
  • landmarks
  • insights
  • socialization
  • lifelong friendships
  • restrictive
  • authentic experiences
  • skip-the-line
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