People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Although
living in
large
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city can be beneficial for some reasons, living in
this
kind of
places
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have more
problems
to
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in their daily routine. For those matter, I strongly argue the argument to move the
people
to
a different towns
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a different town
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. Regarding
to
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human’s desire to make their life as simplest as possible, we already made
a
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destruction to our environment and
this
is the biggest problem for the citizen.
Firstly
, the vehicles, which are getting more and more crowded on the road, are the main reason for bad
traffic
and
polutions
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pollution
pollutions
in most
of
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big
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cities.
For example
, Jakarta, the capital of Indonesia, has been famous as one of the cities with the worst
traffic
and air
polution
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pollution
.
Furthermore
, I personally think that we are actually facing the
problems
that we made by our own
hand
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in the past. Due to that fact,
government
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should not encourage
people
to move to another town, they need to rule the inhabitant
instead
. Moving the citizen to
another places
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may
also
means
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to transfer
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the destruction to a new place.
Instead
,
government
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the government
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should persuade
the
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society to solve the problem from the inside. In case of bad
traffic
and
polution
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pollution
,
government
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may force each
individuals
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to use
a
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public transportation.
Hence
, we can solve the
problems
we are dealing with, not transfer the
problems
to
another areas
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another area
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. In conclusion, the hardest
problems
that are
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detailed
dealt
dealed
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by
people
in
big
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city
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cities
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are actually the
traffic
and the
polution
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pollution
that it caused. For that matter,
Government
should solve the
problems
within their own territory, not by
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it’s
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people
to change citizenship.
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