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Write about the following topic: The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#topic #people #health #future
I
completly
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completely
 disagree with the written
statment
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statement
. I believe that most of the people in the world have more information about their
health
 and
also
 about how they can improve their
healthy
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conditions. Nowadays, information about how harmful is to smoke for our bodies can be seen in many packets of cigars.
This
 is a clear example
how
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of how
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 things can change from our recent past. There is a clear trend in the diminishing of smokers and if
this
 continues it will have a positive impact
in
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on
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 our
health
.
On the other hand
, the alimentation
habbits
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habits
 are changing all over the world and
this
 can affect people’s
health
.
However
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every one
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everyone
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 can choose what to eat every day. Mostly everybody, from developed societies,
know
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 the importance of having a healthy diet. Advances
such
 as the information
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in
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 the menus of fast food restaurants will help people to
have
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 a clever choice before they choose what to eat. Another important issue that I would like to mention is how medicine is changing. There are new discovers and treatments almost every week and
that is
 an
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in equivoque
equivoque
sintom
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symptom
 of how things are changing in order to improve the world’s
health
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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