The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

As
humans
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we always have habits to follow
others
and I completely agree that
our
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this
natural
habit
we cannot only see in our clothing styles, as well as we can see in our daily usage goods. In
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essay, I will discuss
that
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how we are coping
to
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eachother
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each other
and where we reach
with
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this
habit
. Nowadays, we are not coping
others
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only on their attire but as well as, we are following
others
on their basic usage goods. Most
of
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the
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people nowadays have social media connectivity and almost everyone is following their favourite media personalities. Big brands are playing marketing strategies and most of the time giving their product free of cost to these media personalities and as common people when we see these products in our favourite personalities hands,
then
we try to adopt the same things. If our favourite celebrity
have
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some new car model or some new gadget
then
we try to follow the same. There is
bad
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a bad
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impact of
this
habit
on our
society
as well, because of
this
habit
, our
society
is
dividing
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into different classes. Who can effort expensive clothes, gadgets and living style they are treating them as
super class
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superclass
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humans and who don't effort all these fancy things will be part of
poor
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the poor
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class.
This
difference is making
alot
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a lot
of problems in
society
and we are forgetting that as
human
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humans
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we all are
same
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the same
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. I completely agree that as humans we always try to copy
others
in all aspects. But
this
habit
is making
differences
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in our
society
and in
future
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these differences might be the reason of increasing in crime rate and lotting.
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