You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say what the participants liked about the hotel • explain why they were unhappy about the food • suggest what the manage􀀸 should clo to improve the foocl in future

Dear sir, I am writing
this
letter to inform you
the
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feedback of the participants at the meeting.
Firstly
, I would like to tell you the positive response of the people involved in the meeting.They like the way of receiving the senior members gathered in the conference.Even though the hall is small, they have organised it very well.Not only
the
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staff
welcoming
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the participants, but
also
they are dressed in well mannered.
Although
there are positive responses, negative feedback
also
plays a key role. Members who are participated in the meeting,
they
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showed dissatisfaction regarding the food.Mostly 99% of the staff
are disliked
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the food.
Besides
this
vegetarian dishes are of less choice.Because of
this
many
persons
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did not have their dinner too.
Finally
,I would like you to suggest, please provide different kinds of vegetarian and non-vegetarian dishes and keep a separate section for the children with many verities of desserts and Ice-creams. Make sure about
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of the items.It will get
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good feedback from the people. Yours faithfully, Tejaswi.
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