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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #plant #trees #spaces #towns #cities
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countries
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 have been upgraded they have been building
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as a
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 public have not
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 to
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nature
nurture
. According to these
ideas
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 some people
belived
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believed
believe
 that
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 up seedlings,
trees
 where open areas in
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 it is significant than to built more construction. In the forthcoming
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 we will discuss these ideas and I put my own viewpoint whether I agree or disagree.
First
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because
nuture
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nurture
nature
 takes water,nutrients and more basic oxygen. I emphasize that if there
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not
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 oxygen we do not breathe, people will
dead
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 and
earth
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 may be desert as well nowhere plants will grow up.
Trees
distirute
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distribute
 oxygen.
Trees
 and
palnts
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plants
 keep the world,
also
 many
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 of
trees
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located
 in Canada and
this
 country
named
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lung
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 of the world
however
 notwithstanding people cut
trees
 over the year and
instead
 of them building
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something
 for living or relaxing places so
rhat
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that
 plot pollution.
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 we
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contribute
 grow up
trees
 and flowers and staple,
as a
result
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 we prevent most of
illness
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. Everyone increment to
grows
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trees
 where they live. I stand with eagerly
embrace
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mention
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which
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 we see above.
That is
 true buildings are generous and resplendent all of
countries
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 in the world though not to destroy
instead
 of
trees
. In
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conclusion
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if we want to healthy
live
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, inbreathing
with
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fresh air and eating
whole some
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 food nurture to
nuture
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nurture
nature
 and phase out cutting. I could go on and on with
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but I am sure you get the notion
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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