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Some people claim that not enough of wastes from homes is recycled. They say that that only way to increase recycling for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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It is argued that
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 from homes
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 not reused sufficiently for which the government needs to implement strict laws.
This
 essay completely agrees that forming rules and regulations regarding
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waste management can result
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 efficient reprocessing and
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 our natural environment. Most
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the
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people neglect the
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 that has already happened to our environment due to illegal dumping, burning of waste and too much use of plastic. At the same time, we continue to produce plastic
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 doesn’t decompose quickly. Due to
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 of recycling, a lot of plastic is piled up in landfills areas which
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 to be stopped. A strict law can change the public attitude
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toward
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 haphazard dumping and encourage
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the reuse
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 of non-biodegradable materials. Citizens will abide by the rule only if they are punished or have to pay
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a penalty
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. Considering
this
, people will be concerned and reuse most of the wastage from their homes. They will try to dump
lesser
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 amount of trash as far as possible. In
this
 way, people will be involved in the recycling process. For
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 if the government can bring out
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 motto “ More you throw, more you pay”,
then
 obviously residents will try to throw less waste from their homes. In conclusion, it is high time for the government to consider stringent measures and execute laws to protect the environment.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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