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If I had a chance to meet the late Nelson Mandela
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 would have asked him how was it to spend
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 years in
prison
 and come back to forgive the people who had prosecuted him. Because not many people will forgive their oppressors and later on wine and dine with them. It takes a great man to forgive. Nelson Mandela spends twenty-seven years in
prison
 for fighting apartheid. Looking back before his release you could see that his accusers did not want him to come out of
prison
 alive. They tried all kinds of torture, made him stay in isolation, and he was not allowed to socialize with others or get any visitors. After he was released from
prison
 he allowed the
first
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which he contested against his accusers. He won the elections and pave way for some of the accusers into parliament and work with them. By doing that he showed what humanity is all about, that you can work together with your 'enemy' for the betterment of your country and future. That action brought unity
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 South Africa even to date that unity is still being witnessed in their parliament despite the fact that he is now dead. It was through
this
 gesture that now South Africa is now known as the "Rainbow Nation". There is no more apartheid no more racism and they now treat each other with respect and everyone now has the same opportunity and benefits. All the privileges that used to be for the minority only are now for everyone. All
this
 is happening because of the selflessness of Nelson Mandela.
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