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Some people believe that all companies’ decisions should be decided by managers, while others think that it is better to include employees in decision making. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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It is a fact that
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 making the right
decision
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 at the right time is very important for the growth of a
company
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. Many people believe
decision
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 making in a
company
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 should be centralized, while others argue that,
companies
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 should have a more collective approach to
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 making. I believe,
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 it is very important to hear out the
employees
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 while making a critical
decision
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, the final say should come from the upper management and in
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, those who believe
companies
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 should involve
employees
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 while making important decisions think that
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such
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process
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 will enable better
decision
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 making compared to when a bunch of executives
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 around a round table to make decisions.
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 sometimes the upper management itself is relatively inexperienced; it is better to go for a collective approach to
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 making involving the
employees
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.
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, the main problem I see in
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approach
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 is that
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time
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the time
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 taken to reach a consensus on a problem or an issue is very high and
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 sometimes will have an adverse effect on the growth of the
company
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, especially in today's competitive market. On the other side, having a centralized
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decision making
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decision-making
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 system means that
companies
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 can become more agile and adapt to changing market dynamics much faster.
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, one of the main problems faced by many automotive
OEM's
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OEMs
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 is that
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 they are not able to bring
our
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their cars into the market on time. When a survey was conducted among the executives it was found that
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 the main reason for
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 is slow
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 making.
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, all the
employees
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 in a
company
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 will not have or know the broader context or the consequence of a
decision
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 and
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 sometimes will lead
myopic
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decision
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 making which will not help
companies
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 in the long run. To conclude,
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 it is important for
companies
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 to listen to their
employees
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 and take their opinion into account while making a
decision
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, I believe the final
go ahead
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go-ahead
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 should come from the managers

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