WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Since ancient times
people
tried to treat themselves
by
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herbals and
another natural products
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.
In these
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days
this
type of
treatment
is named
as
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alternative
medicine
. Nowadays, more and more
people
with some diseases decide to use
alternative
medicines
instead
of classic
medicine
. In
this
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I will try to discuss
pros
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the pros
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and cons. In my opinion, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages of using traditional
medicine
. The
first
reason is that nobody knows how
this
treatment
will affect
to
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a person’s health. There are a lot of cases when using different herbals caused
allergic
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an allergic
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reaction
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and some
people
dead. The
next
reason is that
people
who do not have any medical education try
alternative
medicines. They do not know what the result will be and hope that it will be positive but not always is like that.
Although
there are a lot of disadvantages, advantages might make
people
not go to
usual
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doctor. The
first
and the main pro is that using herbals does not cause environmental problems
such
as air pollution or gas waste. Many pharmaceutical plants use chemicals which have
harmful
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a harmful
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affect
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on the environment. The other reason is that
alternative
medicines are usually much cheaper than usual
treatment
as you do not have to go to
pharmacy
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the pharmacy
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and buy expensive drugs. To sum it up, the
alternative
treatment
will be forever because it has some advantages which many
people
think that
they
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can outweigh the disadvantages but I do not think so.
The conventional
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medicine
which develops
rocketly
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rockets
rocket
rocketry
will drive out other types of
treatment
in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • conventional medicine
  • health problems
  • treatments
  • doctor
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • dissatisfaction
  • additional choices
  • options
  • proven
  • proper regulation
  • safety
  • effectiveness
  • holistic approach
  • integration
  • beliefs
  • preferences
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