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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex school have disadvantages later in life. To what extend do you agree?

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Nowadays, parents have their own choice to send their kids to a single
school
 or co-educational
school
.
However
, certain
people
 believe that single-sex
school
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schools
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 are not for good
students
 as compared to co-educational
schools
.
First
 of all, parents can have the authority to choose whether they want to send their children to
mixed
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school
 or a single
school
.
As a result
, parents are the ability to think and they know what is best for their kids. They have choices in the
schools
. In recent years, co-educational is not provided in every society but nowadays we can see in every community there is an option to choose. Most
people
 believe that
students
 are more self-confident in mixed education
for example
 they can speak in front of the stage more positive way and they can think more creatively.
On the other hand
, Most
people
 feel that if their toddlers or children study in single-sex
school
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 later they face problems in life. They don't have the mental ability or power to think more wisely as compared to
students
 who study in co-educations. co-educational
schools
 provide a different environment than single-sex
schools
that
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 is why in society
people
 prefer to send their children to mixed
schools
 so that they be more confident. In conclusion, At present
people
 like to send their kids to co-educational
school
 and
i
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 agree with that because
students
 will be thinking more creative, more up to date and more confident in mixed gender
schools
 as compared to single
schools
.
As a result
,
people
 are more focused on
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co-educational
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co educational
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co-educational
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 system
school
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schools
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 rather than
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a
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single
school
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schools
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. .
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