Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extend do you agree?

Social networking
sites
,
for
instance
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facebook
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Facebook
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, are thought by some to have had a detrimental
effect
on individual
people
as well as society and local
communities
.
However
, while
i
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I
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believe that
such
sites
are
manily
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mainly
many
beneficial to the individual, I agree that they have had a damaging
effect
on local
communities
. With regards to individuals, the impact that online social media has had on each individual person has clear advantages.
Firstly
,
people
from different countries are brought together through
such
sites
as
facebook
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whereas
before
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the development of technology and social networking
sites
,
people
rarely had the chance to meet or communicate with anyone outside
with
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their immediate circle or
community
.
Secondly
,
facebook
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also
has social groups which offer individuals a chance to meet and participate in discussions with
people
who share common interests.
On the other hand
, the
effect
that
facebook
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and other social networking
sites
have had on societies and local
communities
can only be seen as negative. Rather than individual
people
taking part in their local
community
, they are instant choosing to take more interest
people
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in people
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online.
Consequently
, the
people
within
local
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community
are no longer farming close or supportive relationships.
Furthermore
, society as a whole is becoming increasingly disjointed and fragmented as
people
spend more time online with
people
they have never met face to face and
who
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whom
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they are unlikely to ever
met
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in the future. To conclude,
although
social networking
sites
have brought individuals closer together, they have not had the same
effect
on society or local
communities
. Local
communities
should do more to try and involve local
people
in local activities in order to promote the future
in
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community
life.
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