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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspapers #source
Many traditionalists believe that
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 many
people
 have
access
 to the
Internet
, conventional
newspapers
 will continue as the major source of
news
. I totally disagree with
this
 view. The speed and convenience of the
Internet
 in
this
 digital age have led to the increasing popularity of online
news
.
Firstly
, the
Internet
 is able to provide
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news
 as it happens, 24 hours a day every day. As long as I have my
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smart phone
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 or laptop with me, I can connect almost instantly to the
Internet
, surf
the
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websites and
access
 the
news
 of my choice across the globe.
Secondly
, more and more
people
 now have
access
 to the
Internet
 and
this
 trend appears set to continue. The more widespread the accessibility of the
Internet
, the more
people
 will come to rely on it as their
news
 source.
In contrast
,
newspapers
 have drawbacks which affect their popularity. One major disincentive of relying on
newspapers
 as a
news
 source is
the
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 cost. Competing with freely available
news
 online, newspaper publishers are facing the reality of falling circulation figures. Some major American
newspapers
 have now introduced online versions alongside their printed editions in an attempt to arrest
this
 trend. Another disadvantage of
newspapers
 is the amount of paper consumed in their production. With growing environmental awareness, there is a body of public opinion which rejects buying
newspapers
 because
this
 involves cutting trees and transporting them to paper mills. While
this
 may not be a major factor at present, the environmental argument will almost certainly gain ground in the future. In conclusion, I would argue that
newspapers
 will continue to decline in importance, and more and more
people
 will use the
Internet
 to
access
 the
news
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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