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Convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#convenience #food #foods #methods #preparation
I agree with
this
 opinion.
This
 problem is really popular in parts of the world. Nowadays, fast
foods
 occur
in
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everywhere
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specially
speciality
specialy
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especially
modern
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in modern
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citys
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cities
.
Kind
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 of
people
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the people
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 that usually eat convenience
foods
are
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is
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student
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students
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 and officers. I think the reason
of
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this
 problem is their time. They live in a
developement
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development
 society so they have to work and study a lot
than
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 different areas.
However
, some
people
 still
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select
slect
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select
 traditional
foods
 because
of
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they
feel
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do feel
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 not good tates in fast
foods
.
Beside
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this
 reason, some opinions explain that using traditional
foods
 is their habit and they can not choose different
foods
. Fast
foods
 are really popular and
food
 preparation
of
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that too.
Specialy
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Speciality
Specially
Special
, officers and students in university always choose
repairting
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repairing
reporting
 their
food
by
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with
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 convenience
foods
. They feel convenient and
having
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have
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many
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 time when they use
fastfood
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fast food
.
Although
 many
people
 select fast
foods
in
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for
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 their meals
but
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apply
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some one
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someone
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want
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 to
cook
 in
kitchen
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. I think when they
cook
, they feel comfortable and that
make
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 a good atmosphere in
family
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the family
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. Meals in
family
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the family
a family
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is
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are
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 really important
with
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 a lot of
people
. They
also
 think that
foods
 are cooked by them that so
claer
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clear
 and café In my opinion, I think
people
 should
cook
 in
kitchen
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the kitchen
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. Only
you
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if you
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 are very busy you can use fast
food
. Because when you
cook
 in your family will safe and
delicous
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delicious
 than fast
food
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