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vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #diseases
Vaccinating
children
 has become increasingly unpopular among certain demographics of society. These people claim that vaccinations are hazardous to
children
's health and as
such
 are not needed.
This
 essay will argue why Vaccinating against spreadable diseases is entirely necessary despite some potential risks. Parents have always been wary of vaccinating their
children
. They are justified
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worried
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 about injecting their
children
 with unfamiliar substances that could potentially make them sick. Parents naturally feel protective of their
children
. Indeed, there have been some recorded instances of
children
unfortunately
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 reacting adversely to their injections. These few instances have bolstered
exsiting
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existing
exciting
 fears of contracting the communicable disease itself. Despite the minor risks associated with Vaccinating
children
, the idea that they are unnecessary and dangerous is completely preposterous. Vaccines have prevented vast numbers of deaths over hundreds of years in countries around the world. The number of deaths so far prevented far outweighs the number of
children
 who have been adversely affected by the immunisations themselves. Some diseases have actually been completely eradicated through vaccination campaigns.
Overall
, the idea that vaccinations are unnecessary and dangerous is ill-informed and dangerous in itself and could potentially lead to a far worse outcome for society.
This
 essay argued that people who are against vaccination have a flawed understanding of vaccinations and underestimate the
affects
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 of what they believe. In my opinion, vaccinating
children
 is an absolute imperative
that is
 entirely justified despite the small and occasional
risk
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 involved.
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