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The charts show the reasons of public complaints from 4 major cities around the globe.

The charts show the reasons of public complaints from 4 major cities around the globe.
The charts illustrate the causes of
complaints
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 from the public in 4 main conurbations over the world.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the percentage of public
complaints
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 about traffic was higher than the other categories in most cities, with the exception of New
Orleans
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 where noise
complaints
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 came out on top.
Additionally
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, Vegas had the most
complaints
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 about traffic,
while
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 the opposite was true for litter in Vegas and New
Orleans
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. Beginning with traffic where Vegas had the highest proportion of
complaints
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 from dwellers at 56%.
Similarly
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, the figures for Sydney and Florence stood at 55% and 52% respectively, whilst New
Orleans
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 accounted for 27%.
However
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, the volume of public
complaints
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 about noise in New
Orleans
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 was the highest at 55%,
whereas
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 the remaining cities ranged between 20% and 28%. Regarding housing
cost
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costs
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, the figure for Florence made up 20%, followed by the other urban areas saw their percentage between 12% and 15%. Turning to the remaining statistics where the highest data from public
complaints
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 about litter was in Florence at 8%. Below
this
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 level was Sydney (5%),
while
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 Sydney and New
Orleans
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 witnessed the same proportion at 4%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints, orleans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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