some people think that we should invent a new language for international communication .Will the benefits of this outweigh the problems ssociated with it ?

is it
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that should create a
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standardised
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global language .
Although
,
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this
brings about certain drawbacks ,it is
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my firm belief that they are overshadowed by its merits.
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, these
language
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are unpopular and
also
cost a lot of money to learn and buy materials .
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Braile
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Braille
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and semaphore
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semaphore
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which are not widely popular ,
due to
the number of
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peope
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people
not much and costing
much
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money ,for money normal
people
who are not compulsory to learn .
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,
this
is
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constrained
contained
in using area and difficult for
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people
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with
people
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about these languages .
On the other hand
,
this
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development
could bring benefits to
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people
's society .In
term
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of merits for
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people
,these languages are used
such
as international languages. It can offer a hand for
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people
more easily on using public services .Like in developing
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or countries ,there always
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blind ways to help
peple
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people
on moving
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or like in the elevator they use
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alphabet to choose the floor they want to go
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on
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an important role
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in helping
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disable
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people
to
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connect with everyone.
Moreover
, these
also
have a big effect on
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care and teaching
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children .
This
is an impossible method for
people
to communicate and bridge the gap with each
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.To
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knowledge and social
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for
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children ,creating
a good generations
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ot
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not
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on caring by others . In conclusion,
while
there are certain drawbacks of
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training
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nd
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not widely popular ,they
are
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pale om significance when weighed against the advantages related to helping
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people
on moving
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and
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a better pedigree
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International communication
  • Cultural unity
  • Trade and business facilitation
  • Language barriers
  • Global education systems
  • International diplomacy
  • Political negotiations
  • Linguistic and cultural identities
  • Resistance
  • Native languages
  • Implementation challenges
  • Vocabulary and grammar rules
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