The culture of different places are now looking similar in modern times. What do you think are the causes of this? Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?

Due to
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globalization, nowadays, people all over
world
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the world have similar interests as well as hobbies, and behind
this
trend, there are
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of factors. A certain segment of society assumes
this
change as a positive thing, I
also
fully agree with that.
This
essay will elucidate some reasons which are responsible for
this
.
Firstly
, numerous social media apps
such
as Facebook, Instagram, Snapchat and so on, give all individuals a platform to share data on daily basis due to the fact that persons who belong to different backgrounds have
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to know about other people’s religions and believes. To illustrate that, a survey was conducted by the Discovery channel states that 40% of folk have information about all the world’s customs and traditions.
Therefore
,
this
leads to
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crowd
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to build similar structures.
Secondly
, immigration
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a vital role
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this
. To cite an instance, in Canada, people have migrated from all over the world, and they built their own scared places here as well as
also
have influenced native persons to follow their
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, and
this
is a beneficial trend because when individuals respect each other’s cultures
then
it is a sign of a healthy community.
Moreover
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strengths a nation’s unity. Another main factor is modern architecture, nowadays every individual is a huge fan of following
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fashion trends, and modern architecture allows them to design or renovate their homes or office buildings according to their needs.
As a result
of
this
, they have modified their houses and business buildings in
such
a way which attracts all kinds of individuals. In conclusion, in my perspective,
this
is a beneficial trend owing to the fact that it delivers numerous benefits to our society, as I mentioned above.
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Example:

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